Pages Critique

I will critique the November issue front page and page five in the October issue.

The link for the November issue is http://www.fremont.k12.ca.us/2199203151847453/lib/2199203151847453/_files/2._11-10-2009.

The link for the October issue is http://www.fremont.k12.ca.us/2199203151847453/lib/2199203151847453/_files/October_13,_2010.pdf.

The November issue’s horizontal photo should have followed the order the Harrower handbook recommended on page 55. The photo should have been on the top, then the byline, the headline, and finally the text.  Quoted from the Harrower handbook on page 55, “When you mishandle the sequence of elements- in this case, putting the headline above the photo- you risk confusion. In new stories, the headline should touch the start of the story.” The story for the photo was a new story so the headline should have touched the start of the story. The other stories on the page were formatted correctly and the photo made an impact on the story. Page 5 in the October issue had many problems in the mug shots. The mug shot should have fit the frame tightly. It should have only shown the face and a bit of the shoulder. The mug shot for Mr. Thompson, Mr. Anaya, and Miss. Downey did not really fit the frame tightly. They should have been like the mug shot of Mr. Rose. It would be better if the pictures fit the frame tighter because it would be easier to see the faces of the teachers. Mr. Thompson and Miss. Downey’s mug shots were also missing a cutline. The position of the mug shot was good for Mr. Thompson and Miss. Downey because it did not waste too much space as stated in page 52 of the Harrower handbook.

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